Ch. 4 Document Analysis assignment

Jacob Bostick
Ch. 4 Document analysis
  1. The Tone of the comments are kind of degrading in my opinion. The use of “you” as a finger pointer at the writing I could care less for. Along with calling things useless. They could be improved by being constructive and talking about the actual writing.
  2. The collaborator does well in the second and fifth comment but the first, third, and fourth the collaborator provides no help really.
  3. The collaborator addresses the writer more than the writing. Some of the comments would bother me if I was receiving them. Three out of five comments are kind of pointless and out of place in a professional environment. The first has the right Idea but something like,   “I didn’t really understand what you were saying here and maybe others will have a problem too. Could you clear it up a bit and explain more?” would be better than the original comment.
  4. The collaborator did a poor job keeping comments focused on the goal of the document and did judge the quality of the writing more.

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  1. dr. kyburzOctober 8, 2018 at 1:48 PM

    OH my. Could you adjust your settings so that the text appears within the text frame?

    Thanks, Jacob!

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